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Sunday, 20 March 2011

2nd Crusader Challenge and Microfiction

Write a FLASH FICTION story (in any format) in 100 words or less, excluding the title. Begin the story with the words, “The goldfish bowl teetered” These four words will be included in the word count.
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I've loosely based my 100 word piece on a real incident with my brother's school goldfish...



Miraculously, the goldfish survived the ordeal.

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Instead of a book blurb I'm doing a Microfiction as Susan seems offline at the moment
The challenge to write a story in 140 characters or less.
I borrowed the image from Lisa's Book Blurb Friday at Writing in the Buff



George's retirement party had been going swingingly until he got up to find the men's room; then his head was going swimmingly. (126 characters with spaces)
Posted by scribbleandedit.blogspot.co.uk at 19:36

50 comments:

  1. Theresa Milstein20 March 2011 at 19:55

    You're the only one I've seen so far to put the story in a goldfish bowl. Glad the goldfish didn't bite the bucket.

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  2. Old Kitty20 March 2011 at 20:23

    Oh no!! Save the goldfish!! I hope it's ok!!! What a cliffhanger of a microfiction story!! What drama and action!! Well done you!

    Your book blurb is very funny and apt! Yay! take care
    x

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  3. Danette20 March 2011 at 20:54

    Sounds like a precarious situation- glad to know the goldfish was saved! Very cute little story! Enjoyed it very much!

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  4. Deniz Bevan20 March 2011 at 21:06

    Oh, the poor fishy! I hope he's okay.

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  5. Anonymous21 March 2011 at 00:49

    Beautifully done :D I'm impressed the goldfish made it, too.

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  6. Gail M Baugniet - Author21 March 2011 at 06:34

    I was glad the goldfish story had a happy ending!

    I signed up for my first A-Z Blogging Challenge, #472, and saw your blog listed so I just stopped by to say "Hi". I look forward to reading your "alphabet" posts in April.

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  7. Sarah Ketley21 March 2011 at 10:28

    one lucky goldfish!

    I love your blog and what you did with the goldfish bowl... great job!

    Nice to see you over at my blog :-)

    happy writing

    sarah

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  8. Anonymous21 March 2011 at 12:38

    Great tension and love the graphics!

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  9. Tara21 March 2011 at 12:55

    Phew. So glad you added the end somewhere. I was worried. :)

    Great writing!

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  10. Charity Bradford21 March 2011 at 13:23

    Aaahh! I'm missing something. I can't find the story or the graphics or anything. I'm going to try reloading the page cause it sounds like it was a good story.

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  11. Charity Bradford21 March 2011 at 13:25

    Whew! Reloading worked. Nice job putting it in the goldfish graphic. I could totally see a little girl worrying over her goldfish like that. Thanks for sharing.

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  12. Carol Riggs21 March 2011 at 15:19

    Very action-packed story! I liked the "Muuuum" part too--very UK. LOL Nice graphic and the idea to put the story inside the bowl; clever!

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  13. Ellie Garratt21 March 2011 at 16:20

    The fish very nearly kicked the bucket. LOL. I really enjoyed your flash fiction piece - you should do more!

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  14. N. R. Williams21 March 2011 at 16:26

    Oh, we have the same background, love it. I had to do flowers for spring. Liked both stories above.
    Nancy
    N. R. Williams, The Treasures of Carmelidrium.

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  15. Tony Benson21 March 2011 at 17:18

    I loved this story. I like the way the end references the beginning, and that it leaves us with hope, but in an un-resolved situation. Well written.

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  16. Misha Gerrick21 March 2011 at 17:42

    Nicely done. I loved the description of how the girl held her hands before her face. :-)

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  17. Unknown21 March 2011 at 17:57

    Poor fish! Did he (she?) survive?

    PS. her hands gripping her face like a cage <--- I like that :-)

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  18. Maggie21 March 2011 at 18:02

    Aaw, a happy ending. Love it. : )

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  19. Cherie Reich21 March 2011 at 18:12

    I'm glad to hear the goldfish survived the ordeal. I love how you wrote it in the goldfish bowl picture too. Very ingenious.

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  20. David P. King21 March 2011 at 18:38

    Now that was a fun little read. Thank you for sharing that.

    I gave you a shout-out on my blog, too. :)

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  21. Margo Benson21 March 2011 at 19:55

    Oh that was terrific! I held my breath through the whole piece. Great writing.

    Loved the micro, too!

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  22. Anonymous21 March 2011 at 20:34

    talented and fantastic post.





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  23. Anonymous21 March 2011 at 20:35

    The life of a goldfish is stressful!

    Nikki

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  24. Ben Langhinrichs21 March 2011 at 20:54

    Clever and almost poetic shape story.

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  25. Sierra Gardner21 March 2011 at 21:18

    I love the little kid and am so glad the goldfish survived =)

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  26. CherylAnne Ham21 March 2011 at 21:52

    Happy to see the fishy ended up okay (unlike the poor guy in my story - lol). Great job on the challenge. It's not easy writing such a short story. I almost did the exact same thing as you with putting my story inside fishbowl but I couldn't get it to look right. I love that you did it. It looks great! :)

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  27. Summer Ross22 March 2011 at 02:09

    Nicely done and I am glad the fish survived!

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  28. Michael Di Gesu22 March 2011 at 02:43

    I thought you were going to leave us hanging there for a moment ... until I scrolled down.

    First, Madeleine, I LOVE that you wrote your entry in a goldfish bowl... very original.

    Second, I thought you story was very realistic and exciting. I really kept me on the edge... nice job.

    Michael

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  29. Trisha22 March 2011 at 02:58

    Aww, poor goldfish :( Hope he lives!!

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  30. Cally Jackson22 March 2011 at 07:53

    That's one tough goldfish to survive that! So glad he made it. :-)

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  31. Anonymous22 March 2011 at 14:59

    Sounds like George slipped on a, ahem, puddle in the men's room and fell into a wormhole where all kinds of crazy things happened.

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  32. scribbleandedit.blogspot.co.uk22 March 2011 at 20:43

    The poor goldfish got flattened by the books being torn off the shelves and yet he still survived!

    LOL! yes maybe George did fall into a wormhole. Now that's a thought! :O)

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  33. alberta ross22 March 2011 at 21:07

    just think of the tale that fish can tell the others when he returns to school

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  34. Denise Covey22 March 2011 at 21:35

    Firstly I love the art. It is so cute. Your story was great. The stressful life of a goldfish.

    Denise<3

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  35. M Pax22 March 2011 at 21:57

    I'm glad the goldfish lived. :D

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  36. Amanda Milner22 March 2011 at 22:21

    Thank goodness the fish made it!! Very nearly a tragic little piece of flash fiction! ;)

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  37. Dominic de Mattos22 March 2011 at 23:10

    I loved both the flash fiction and the MFM. Double bubble!

    :Dom

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  38. Susan Fields23 March 2011 at 00:53

    Those were great - so glad to hear the goldfish survived!

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  39. Angela Scott23 March 2011 at 05:53

    Oh, I was worried about the goldfish.

    But if you have to go to the big fishbowl in the sky, best do it underneath a big ol' pile of novels :)

    ~Angela

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  40. Unknown23 March 2011 at 15:23

    Glad to hear the goldfish survived! I love that you were able to pen some creative nonfiction from this prompt. Bravo!

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  41. Crystal Collier23 March 2011 at 16:04

    Nicely done. Characterization here is fabulous.

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  42. scribbleandedit.blogspot.co.uk23 March 2011 at 16:21

    Actually Nicole it was fiction because the goldfish on which the story is based was my brother's responsibility and the fish flew into the bookcase because my Mum tried to pick it up in her hands! LOL! :O)

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  43. Writer23 March 2011 at 18:02

    Really cute. Strong voice.

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  44. Alison Pearce Stevens23 March 2011 at 20:02

    The goldfish disappearing behind the novels made me laugh. Great entry!

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  45. Anonymous24 March 2011 at 16:36

    Great idea to put it in a goldfish bowl and love the story. I can just picture Mrs. Barnaby reading a historical romance.

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  46. jkraus846424 March 2011 at 21:18

    Great story. Loved the goldfish bowl. Fast paced and fun.

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  47. Witless Exposition25 March 2011 at 15:38

    Love the way you formatted this! It's amazing the goldfish survived. I guess they're sturdier than I thought.

    Love the Twitter fiction, too!

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  48. Alison Miller26 March 2011 at 11:39

    Oh I love the ending to this! Great job!

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  49. Bess Weatherby26 March 2011 at 16:32

    Poor goldfish!

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  50. Adina West27 March 2011 at 00:43

    Love how you put the entire story inside an image of a goldfish bowl. :-)

    Very glad the fish survived!

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