Summer Ross' NEW CREATION BLOGFEST
Rules : Choose one sentence from your favourite last line from a story you wrote last year and one brand new sentence to start something new.
'Only the pale skin of her face might give her away'.
(Taken from a YA novel I began last year)
'Janise felt every bit the tortoise trying to walk upright with its shell strapped to its back'.
(Taken from a short story I'm gonna finish writing sometime this month or maybe next)
Belated Happy Birthday Wishes to Summer
Great sentences - the first one feels sad because your mc is all pale and trying not to be!
The second one has a great imagery - poor burdened Janise!!! Lovely! Take care
First sentence. Vampire? I'm wondering...ReplyDelete
Stopping by for the blogfest! Your opening sentence could be a marvelous metaphor (which is what I am hoping!!!!)ReplyDelete
Thank you so much for the birthday wishes and participating. I love your lines. the new one gives so much potential. happy writing.ReplyDelete
Hmm! I'm curious. I want to know why the character is burdened! :)ReplyDelete
The first sentence makes me wonder why she's pale--the second intrigues me because the character's obviously carrying something around!ReplyDelete
It's interesting how sentences out of context can completely mislead the reader.ReplyDelete
Well no in the first she's not a vampire. She's hiding from someone.
Yes Janise is carrying something around physically as well as possibly metaphorically.
Glad you enjoyed my snippets :O)
Made me think of poor old Christian in The Pilgrim's Progress! An intriguing start. :)ReplyDelete
Interesting. I'm wondering who 'she's trying to fit in among without being given away, in the ending - and it doesn't sound like an definitive end while there's still uncertainty there. But lots of stories still have uncertainties, I guess. I know that mine do. (That's why there's sequels.)ReplyDelete
And the beginning is just a great sentence. I'm not sure what's making Janise feel that way, but I love the mental picture from the simile! (The tortoise is a bit cartoon-like, in my head.)
Thanks for taking part in this blogfest. I signed up late, but I'd love to know what you think of my sentences!