Flashing By: Microfiction Monday

Flash fiction is fiction of extreme brevity. There is no widely accepted definition of the length of the category.

Micro Fiction is provocative fiction that requires tight analysis and editing. Taking an idea and distilling it into a micro-cosm of its original self is the challenge. The form is strictly prose.
(Is it the prose equivalent of a Haiku in poetry, using a traditional 5, 7, 5 syllable structure, perhaps?)

• In a few words the story thread must hold the plot together.
• By playing against expectations you must let your narrator tell the reader one thing to lead him in one direction, while the text leads the reader somewhere else.
• Use a directive last sentence that gives narrative insight or opinion.
• Make re-reads inviting.
• Close with a phrase that sends the reader back into the story:

Susan, at Stony River, hosts Microfiction Monday

"Where a picture paints 140 characters, or even fewer."

My thanks to Ellie for leading me to this exercise via her blog.

I've never tried this before, so here's my attempt:

'The driver chatted about his home in Belpre, oblivious it seemed. The Coolville turn-off loomed closer. Flashed by. A word in edgeways was an impossible destination'. (139 characters)

or:

Temperatures were 104°F in the shade. Coolville looked inviting. Maybe he should take Roxy there. She had assets, Frank grinned lasciviously, but not class. (133 characters)

An unrelated Haiku (apols for the pun!):

Agony Aunt by Madeleine Maddocks

She thrashes wildly
Pain evident in her eyes
On seeing her niece


Does it work?

EPILOGUE:
Decided to visit Coolville on Google maps and immediately happened upon this:

Spooky cool perhaps?

Haiku

Coolville looms ahead

Speeding along the highway

Eight miles, then we’re there