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Friday, 10 February 2012

Voices Blogfest #3 Emotion

My RFW post for The Long, Cool Aphrodisiac will be posted Saturday afternoon.

Thanks to Cassie Mae and Angela Cothran for hosting this blogfest. I've had a fun time.
The final prompt is for an
Emotion Flash Fiction : Emotion is the engine of a story. Pick an emotion and in a flash fiction piece of 250 words MAKE us feel it! We want to connect with your character.

I have decided to stay with my WIP novel and my MC Ginny from 'Once Forgotten' and treat you all to another excerpt, which I've edited down to in 250 words & to make sure I don't give too much of the novel plot away too soon....


Ginny's head felt as fragile as a cracked eggshell, as she lay on the top of the handmade patchwork quilt that had been one of her sister-in-law’s creations, in blues with hints of gold. She could feel the tears on her cheeks like dried, stagnant pools, while a twisting burn gripped her throat. She hadn’t even had time to have her breakfast. The initial shock of waking that morning to find two police officers on her doorstep, with sombre expressions and restless, wary eyes suggested that the news must be unconscionably awful. Her voice strangled right out of her throat as they explained that a man fitting the description she had given them for Bernard, had been found stabbed the previous night. They would like her to accompany them to the mortuary to identify the body.
A frenzy of the most intense emotions had begun circulating around her body.  She felt her head lift as light as a helium balloon. The firm hands of PC White helped her to a chair. Questions had begun competing for answers in her head. Why was Bernard at that particular pub? Why hadn’t Guy been with him? Could it be someone else? 
Nothing since yesterday morning had made any sense. The twisting burn in her throat returned as the stark image of that grey, lifeless face, staring up at her in the mortuary came back into her mind. More hot tears nettled her eyes at the memory.
“Oh Bernard!” she sobbed, "I need you!"

So what emotions are you feeling ?
Check out my interview voices #1
Check out my  #2 Dialogue
I read a very good post by an editor (Sorry I forgot which one), who said never write the words 'feeling' but rather describe the feelings without the initial qualifier (e.g. s/he was feeling or s/he felt), so I took that to heart in my subsequent writing.