Oh dear, I recently sent out a short story to a magazine and today I received the above reply. While I don't feel utterly devastated, as I would have done in the past, naturally I was disappointed. I put that down to everyone's fantastic support and advice here in blogland.
Okay so what is the story about?
A young man in need of a career change and someone with whom to share his life.
So what happens?
He drops a poem in the park which a young widow finds. They develop an anonymous romance through sharing poems and then they meet by chance.
So, perhaps you could tell me: Is the opening deathly dull?
How could I create the conflict and tension to make it a better story?
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