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Monday, 6 September 2010

Microfiction Monday: Déjà vu!

Susan from Stony River,set us another great
picture for this Monday's Microfiction Challenge
"Where a picture paints 140 characters, or even fewer."
Déjà vu!

Jonah’s flashbacks began as inclement weather hit his boat. He’d been having a whale of a time. Heavens, he said, What a Déjà view!   Micro fiction (131 characters with spaces)


A Haiku (5,7,5 syllables):

Surf’s Up
Inclement weather
A lone yachtsman rides the waves
Spring tide crests and troughs.

(Apols for the puns)

21 comments:

  1. I like your subsequent haiku to Susan's meme. Well done!

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  2. "Heavens, he said, What a Déjà view!" Priceless.

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  3. LOL. Too funny! A whale of a time! Brilliant.

    Have a great week x

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  4. Thank you, thank you, I reply bowing sheepishly.
    ;O)

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  5. What a gem!! And definitely a whale of a time!! Terrific! Hope you have a great week!

    Sylvia

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  6. Love the haiku, but using Jonah in your story was a touch of brilliance! Well done.

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  7. Some guys should just stay ashore once they get there. :)

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  8. I really chuckled at Jonah's predicament! Good one this week. Thanks for sharing both of them with us.
    Cheers!

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  9. Loved this!!! So glad I stopped by for a visit & now make your 20th follower! :)

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  10. I love connecting with other aspiring authors. Good luck on your journey.

    I'm over from KarenG's blog BBQ. What a great idea, no?

    Have a great week.

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  11. LOL! I like the Biblical allusion...good one!

    I read your "Quiet" post and realized that my hubby and I are the reverse of you and your wife--I like solitude whereas my husband revels in having people around. He needs an audience.

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  12. Thank you for all your wonderful comments everyone. They bring a silly smile of pleasure to my face.
    :O))))))

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  13. So good and a laugh to share!
    Love these haiku's I've been reading lately.

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  14. Very good! The haiku is especially perfect for the picture.

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  15. Madeleine, I came back to tell you about the hair reference. Think Luke Skywalker in the original movie...great hair, whiny voice, all ego . . .

    And once, my daughter babysat some British kids and they were playing Star Wars. The little boy, about 4, said (in a rich British accent), "I'll be Luke! I've got the hair!" It has sense become a tag line in our household, i.e.

    Who's taking out the garbage? answer, "I'll be Luke! I've got the hair!"

    Silly...and ha ha, my word verification is whelu which sounds a lot like WHALE EW!

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  16. I'm a big Jonah fan. My Sunday blogs during the summer were about Jonah. My WIP is inspired by Jonah. A clever rendition on your part.

    Lee
    Tossing It Out

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  17. Thank you everyone.
    I'm writing a particularly harrowing short story at the moment, so all your light hearted comments really raise my spirits again.

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